Friday 4 December 2015

Week 8 Class Reflection

Positive:
We finished and posted our buddy editing- it got much better.
A whole team ran movie making for the little kids.
We used the 'learning pit' strategies in our editing.
We found a way to make our school clean and tidy.
Our inquiry is ready for Market Day tonight.
The Chicken Team have been very self managing on their projects.
Some of our gardens go judged.
We handed in AG projects for marking.
Lots of swimming.

Negative:
The heat pump didn't work on a hot day.
I nearly gave up on a hard piece of learning.
Allana had to growl about noise levels.
Allana had to practise having a 2cm voice for her class next year.
In Monday Hui, we were not a good role model.
I was doing negative self talk.

Next week:
Bring plastic bags.
Tidy up the class.
Clean out our draws.
Be VERY adaptable in The Big Space.
Return mascots and books from home.
Bring our togs.
Keep working and learning.
Be a good role model.
Be tolerant - walk away and stay calm.










Thursday 3 December 2015

Ella's Holiday - Buddy Writing

After Buddy Editing:


My special Holiday
Rarotonga
Zoom went the plane as we sped into action. We had to take a plane to Auckland then to Rarotonga. The flight to Raro had t.v. screens but the flight to Auckland did not.


Sunday:
Today I went snorkeling then my cousins came over, we played; Rugby, hide and go seek, nerf howler ller and tag. It was fun Emmerson and louie stayed the night.


Monday:
Today I went to the hotel that my cousins  staying in. We went to the pool and the beach, it was fun! Eve went to kids club. Tuesday Today I went snorkeling  with my. Me and my mum went our fare and saw cool fish.


Wednesday:
Today we all had a relaxing day at home and went to the store with John to buy stuff for our tea. We got a treat too!


Thursday:
Today I took the bus to see my cousins at the resort and I stayed the night there. We went to kids club. I love that there was a big tramp and we got to go down to the beach.


Friday:
Tonight we had a party for my mum’s birthday. Emy and Louie stayed the night at our house, in our little holiday home.


Saturday:
Today we all went to the resort to do some more swimming, kayaking and snorkeling. After that we went to diner for my Aunty and Uncles 10th wedding anniversary.


Sunday:
Today we had to say goodbye to my cousins, then we moved to a different home.


Monday :
Today we went snorkeling at fruits of rarotonga which is the best place in raro to snorkel. We got a ice cream on the way home.


Tuesday: 
I woke up and boom went my legs we went to a pool then we got ready and left on a plane back to my home. I got to help out on the plane and after that they gave me extra treats.


Tuesday:
But we arrived home on a Wednesday because we crossed the date-line.  I loved going to Rarotonga because I got to see lots of cool fish and I was seeing my cousins who live on the other side of the world.




What we started with:


Rarotonga Zome went the plan as we sped in to action. we hade to tack a plan to auckland then to Rarotonga. The flit to Raro had tv skrens but the flit to auckland did not. Sunday Today I went snokling then my cazins came over, we played; Rugby, hide and go seke, nerf holler and tag it was fun Eme and louie stayed the nite. Monday Today I went to the hotal that my cazins are staying in. We went to the pool and the bech, it was fun! Eve went to kids club. Tuesday Today I went snokling with my cazins. Me and my mum went our fare and saw cool fish. Wednesday Today we all had a relaxing day at home and went to the stor with John. Thursday Today I toke the bus to see my cazins at the resort and I stayed the night ther. We went to kids club ther. Friday Tonight we had a party for my mums burthday. Emy and Louie stayed the night at our house. Saturday Today we all wet to the resort to do some more swimming, kayaking and snokling. After that we went to diner for my Aunty and Uncles 10th wedding anniversary. Sunday Today we had to say goodbye to my cazins, then we moved to a difrient home. Monday Today we went snokling at frits of rarotonga wisch is the best plas in raro to snokel. We got a ice cream on the way home. Tuesday I woke up and zome went my legs we went to a pool then we got ready and lefed on a plane back to my home. I got to halp out on the plane and after that they gav me extear treats. We left on a Tuesday but we arrived home on a Wednesady beacause we crossed the date line. Summary I loved going to Rarotonga because I got to see lots of cool fish and I seeing my cazins who live on the other side of the world.


Wednesday 2 December 2015

the dwarf-William

Once there was a dwarf who smelt funny like bananas and this is the funny thing was that his face looked as though it was a peach also he was very rich and he was 1000 yeas old. One day he was in his cave Oh sorry I forgot to mention that he lived in a cave.

One day he was in his cave and there was someone that knocked on the door it must of been his mother because they both had small tiny tiny heads she  ask if he could just have a drink of water but the dwarf said NO! go away and he knocked on the door again and asked if the dwarf new where he could get some water and the dwarf said no go way and stay away.

Then the dwarf went out to his local grocery store and everyone seemed to be very mean because everyone used be very nice but today they were not and then someone said to him why can't you just be nice then that night and then he said sorry the person he was mean to and then the next day everyone was nice to him.


by William edited by Kelsey

Moment in Time: The dogs at the beach by Ursula

improved with buddy editing

I look down to sea from the wharf, I see two dogs yapping and playing in the water leaping in the salty sea.
The eyes of the big dog I just can't stop watching them. His eyes glow as blue as the dreamy Milky Way.

On the other hand the little dog yapping,hazel like wheat and its sort charcoal black fur, thickened by the light blue sandy water. The little dogs whiskery face sticking up like hay. Both of the dogs playing around.

I'm walking back to the wharf. I'm packing up my things to go home. I look at the dogs one more time then I walk home.
                                                   this is what I started with
I look down to sea from the wharf, I see two dogs jumping around, splashing and yapping happily.
I run down to see them better, still when I get there playing in the water leaping in the salty sea.
The eyes of the big dog I just can't stop watching them. His eyes glow as blue as the dreamy Milky Way.
On the other hand the little dog yapping , hazel like wheat and its sort charcoal black fur, thickened by the light blue sandy water. The little dogs whiskery face sticking up like hay. Both of the dogs playing around.
I'm walking back to the wharf. I'm packing up my things to go home. I look at the dogs one more time then I walk home.

Todd and Blake buddy editing

After editing:
On a sunny summer day on a cliff.

My hands were grasping onto an imaginary boogie board as I jumped off the smooth cliff into the 50 kilometre deep water. I could hear my shorts flapping in the wind like clothes on the washing line and I could see the water rippling in front of me.

“What  am I doing?” I screamed.  “Am I going to die?“

Oh no, I thought as I watched my best pair of blue and yellow jandals sit on the cliff. I wanted to get them back, but I couldn’t because I was already halfway through the air.

Will I ever see my blue and yellow beach jandals again?


Before editing:
On a sunny summers day.
My hands were grasping onto an imaginary boogi board as I jumped off the cliff. I could hear my shorts flapping in the wind and I could see the water rippling in front of me. What was I doing? Was I going to die? Oh no! i thought as I watched my best pair of jandals sit on the cliff. I wanted to get them back, but I couldn't

Will he ever see his jandals again?

My new blog - Buddy editing


Writing after editing with a buddy:
Hi, I’m Tegan and I am really excited about having my own blog except it is not really a blog it’s a blog that our class shares that has links to our  blogs on it so it is kidsafe. I am going to spend my time doing free choice fun on it but also.  Please check it out and write me a comment.


This is what we started with...
I  am Tegan and I am really excited about having my own blog. I am going to put things on it like stories about my horse and my pet chicken that died today.  Please check it out and write me a comment.  

Tuesday 1 December 2015

Nate and Adele sour strips

Sour Strips - Nate and Blake



This is what we started with
Sour strips are stuck to my teeth like rainbow peanut butter.


They are stripy like a colourful zebra in the circus.


They are the colours of leaves in Autumn.





This is what Nate and Adele edited to make it sound better.
Sour strips are stuck to my shiny white teeth like brand new super glue.
They are as stretchy as purple gum.    


They are as colourful as rainbow streamers hanging from the bright blue roof.
They are as yummy as ice cream soda fizzy drink and a chocolate cake that has just come out of the oven




Buddy Editing - William & Brigid

After buddy editing:

I believe that a cat is a better pet than a dog because…

To begin with, your on your sofa sipping hot milo and dreaming about a fluffy cat, your phone rings and someone says that your dog is at there house you spill your milo down your shirt in shock. You have to go and pick up your dog in the pouring rain.

Imagine walking down the in your best jeans, you have to walk your dog because they were yapping wildly for a walk and it starts raining. what would you do then if your dog got into a fight with another dog.

So just remember to get a cat instead of a dog!
By William. 


Before editing:
A cat is the best pet!


I believe that everyone should have a cat not a dog.


To begin with dogs fight just think if you were going for a walk and your dog saw a different dog and then it started fighting with the different dog what would you do then.


Also cats don’t scare you. Would you like a pet that is a fluffy friend of a grubby friend.


Go out and get yourself a cat if you.

by William

Buddy Editing Taylor

Moment in Time: Dogs at the Beach by Taylor

Edited with a ako buddy


               

The Dogs are playing in the Beach. Wait a minute are they playing or are they “tackling” each other? I don't know. How about we just say they are or is the big dog “running” over the small Dog?

The big Dog is looking in the distance. At who knows what. Their fur is “DRENCHED”. The water around them is “SPLASHING” like glass breaking on the Lino. And their fur is  

The soaking dogs are playing and splashing around everywhere and there fur is like “spikes” on there big or small bodies.


Before Editing:
The dogs The dogs are playing in the beach wait a minute are they playing or are they tackling each other. I don't know. How about we just say they are or is the big dog running over the small dog.

The big dog is looking in the distance. At who knows what.

Their fur is DRENCHED. The water around them is SPLASHING like glass braking on the Lino.

Buddy Editing - Ben & Darcie

Improved with buddy editing.

Being home sick is so boring. It’s sometimes its fun when you watch movies although it’s still boring.


Nona and her dog Tilly  came on saturday that’s the good news. She left on sunday though that’s the bad news. Grrr growled Tilly(Nona’s dog) when Willie (our cat) came by her.

It would be so much better at school with my friends.



This is what we started with:
Being home sick is so boring. Its sometimes its fun when you watch movies although its still boring. Nona and her dog Tilly  came on saturday thats the good thing. She left on sun grrrrr growled Tilly when Willie (our cat) came by her. It  would be much better at school.  boring. day though.

Max W Buddy Editing

Improved with buddy editing:
On Monday I went to the flying burrito brothers. We met our dad there so we went in and I saw my dad. We ordered our food, our drink, our dessert and milkshakes.
First we had our main food. I had Nachos and my drink was lemonade. We ate our food ( it had a lot of tomato) and I got a lot of chips.
Then we got some desert. My desert was churros and ice cream with raspberry sauce, chocolate sauce and caramel sauce. It was filling because I had two churros and ice cream. Churros are a Mexican donut and they are very long and tasty.
Then we got our milkshakes the flavours were Oreo milkshake and snickers milkshake. We had two sips of each and I got the Oreo milkshake first it tasted like chocolate. Then I got the snickers milkshake it was really salty so I didn't have two sips on the snickers milkshake.



This is what we started off with:
On Monday I went to the flying burrito brothers. We met our dad there so we went in and I saw my dad. We ordered our food, our drink, our dessert and milkshakes.
First we had our main food. I had Nachos and my drink was lemonade. We ate our food ( it had a lot of tomato) and I got a lot of chips.
Then we got some desert. My desert was churros and ice cream with raspberry sauce, chocolate sauce and caramel sauce. It was filling because I had two churros and ice cream. Churros are a Mexican donut and they are very long and tasty.
Then we got our milkshakes the flavours were Oreo milkshake and snickers milkshake. We had two sips of each and I got the Oreo milkshake first it tasted like chocolate. Then I got the snickers milkshake it was really salty so I didn't have two sips on the snickers milkshake.